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The Smartphone
I am a smartphone nowadays people spend a lot of times with me
Yes. I am - a smart phone.
And I am powerful.I can build you up, break you down , make you whole. And tear you down.
I can be anything I am.
Now, do you still wanna take a chance on me?
There is many application that you can use in life there is many advanced technology built in me and rich people who could buy me from shop or through online shopping. I have many advanced facilities like accessing internet ,make video calls , e-mail etc…,
I change the boundaries of friendship but some of the people abusing me.
People are easily aware of news and events…thank me
i have a large communicational skills to meet peoples. Kids love me more to watch rhymes and stories or games and that’s why they are addicted to me cause they wanna be always intertain
people even dont want to hide their mony like me,cos i have many secrit of peoples .
girls love me for their privacy
Things are just so cool with me and the people. Until one day when a cyclops decided to take over the world. He got King Pixel locked in the wires. And then, everything is in jeopardy…
i have many names due to people love me, samsung hwawi oppo and etc and available with different colours in the market.
Alam is my owner
I love him bcos he keep me healty cool and safe in his pocket and love me like his wife
But unfortunately must of us do not live for along time I am not sure he love me frankly
I am like sigar if once on it must be closed after some time. but i am longer to live then sigar
Some people use me for abuse and annoying others it happens sometimes and like a price of cake
The abusing of mobile phone related to the mind of users
If the user want to good from me I am like a opened textbook
I can give you knowledge about everything in this world
I can teach you about every creatures
in short i m usefull for those who know the use of mine
and just a device for those who waste their time searching in my bad parts.
i love those who keep me usefull for their own and others
the end
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The Smartphone

I am a smartphone.
People spend a lot of time with me.
Yes, I am a smart phone.
And I am powerful.
I can build you up, break you down, make you whole, and tear you down.
I can be anything.
I am a smart phone.

There are many applications that you can use with me.
There are many advanced technologies built into me.
You can buy me from shops or online.
I have many advanced features like accessing the internet, making video calls, e-mail and more.
Thanks to me, people have instant access to news and events.

I have changed the boundaries of friendship.
I make it easy to meet people.
Kids love to watch rhymes and stories or games.
That’s why they are addicted to me,
because they want to constantly be entertained.
Girls love me for their privacy.
Everyone thinks I am just so cool!
People don’t even hide their money from me.
I know many secrets.

I have many names because people love me,
Samsung, Huawei, Oppo and more.
I am available in different colors.

Alam is my owner.
I just love him!
He keeps me healthy, cool and safe in his pocket.
And he loves me like his wife!

But unfortunately, cellphones do not live for a long time.
I am like a cigar.
Once you light it, it won’t last forever.
But, I am longer-lived than a cigar.

Some people use me to abuse and annoy others.
It happens sometimes
[and like a price of cake?]
mobile phone abuse affects the mind of the user.

If the user wants to use me for good, I am like an open textbook.
I can give you knowledge about everything in this world.
I can teach you about every creature.
In short, I am useful for those who know how to use me.
And just a tool for those who waste their time searching for bad stuff.

I love those who find me useful for their own good and the good of others.

THE END

PS, I took the liberty to delete some of the lines I thought were unnecessary. Hope you don’t mind. Rodrigo

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