Is there someone who can help to correct my writing

actually i’m learning English by myself now,and i need to take a IELTS Test soon,i’m really puzzled by finding someone to correct my writing there someone who can help me to solve this problem?

this linked to the graph:

 all statistics can be categoried into 2 stages ,with the population of listening to the radio predominant watching TV,and TV audience predominance of radio listener.dispite the slight fluctuation,both curves have a single bump with the peak in different periods of a day.
 as to the percentage of radio audience,it soared between 6 and 8 am,reach its peak at 28%,then followed by easing down during the rest of the day.
 back to the proportion of television watcher,its curve fluctated up in the morning,and shared the same percentage with radio audience around 1 pm.and the peak hour come at night around 8 pm,almost outpercent its couterpart 2 to 1,at 45%,then followed by a plunging until about 3 am./retrieved dramatically until 3 am.
 through this graph,we can discern that people tend to listen to the radio in the morning and have more tendency to watch TV at night.

pmilone, our friend cannot access Youtube because he lives in China.

Vincent to help us you should explain if the test includes some questions, or you have to write a summary based on plot.
Or you have to rewrite the summary?
Because your text is not grammaticaly corrected!
In this case native people should do it.

Thanks,pmilone and YiagosEE.I forgot to post the writing demand,thanks for your reminding.I pasted the writing demand below.

IELTS Writing Task 1
In the first part, you are given a task based on some graphic or pictorial information. You are expected to write a descriptive report of at least 150 words on the information provided.

The Writing Task 1 of the IELTS Academic test requires you to write a summary of at least 150 words in response to a particular graph (bar, line or pie graph), table, chart, or process (how something works, how something is done). This task test your ability to select and report the main features, to describe and compare data, identify significance and trends in factual information, or describe a process.

YiagosEE,you are right,it’s a problem for us in China to log in the Youtube,but actually I found a way to circumvent it,it’s a small tool called goagent.
I have seen that video , and tried , but I have a problem , It told me I need more points to post that request , what’s the points ? Seems I need to buy them ?