I also thought of playing this game … very good! At the risk of cluttering the airwaves, here’s to my point about rhyming, scanning and obeying the rules of translation. This is the song Осенний Хоровод (Autumn Roundelay) by Skolot:
Original:
Осенний хоровод
Я брел лесной тропой,
Укрытою листвой,
Прохладен воздух был,
Но тело не страдало.
Но маялась душа,
Усталая душа,
В темницу уж давно
Она попала.
Покой да тишина
Вокруг царили,
И мысли лишь о ней
Мне больно в сердце били,
Зайду на холм
И крикну одиноко,
Ну где же ты?
Аль близко, аль далеко?
Мой верный конь
Тихонько рядом шел,
Деля со мной всегда
И радости, и горе.
Дождь моросил,
А легкий ветерок,
Кружил мою печаль
В осеннем хороводе.
Тоскливая пора
Вокруг царила
А осень не спеша
Листвою все покрыла
И не найти следов
Ни малого намека
О как найти тебя?!
Вдруг жизни мало срока?!
Ну где же ты?!
Аль близко, аль далеко?!
Manual translation:
An Autumn Roundelay
I walked a woodland path
All carpeted with leaves,
The air was growing cool,
But I unfeeling;
On and on my soul,
On went my weary soul,
Imprisoned long ago
In darkness, kneeling
Peaceful quietness
Ruled the air around me
But thoughts of her alone
Broke down my heart, and found me
I make for the hill,
Alone and in dismay
Where are you now?
Close by, or far away?
My faithful mare
In silence at my side,
Sharing with me ever
My happiness and grief
So cold the rain,
A laughing, playful breeze
Spun round my load of sadness—
An autumn roundelay
A dreary time of waste,
Her coronet she weaves,
Yes, autumn makes no haste,
But chokes the world with leaves
Of you I found no trace,
No footprint on the way
Oh, how will I find you?
I’ll search til my last day …
Where are you now?
Close by, or far away?
Google Translate:
Autumn dance
I walked the forest trail,
Shelter foliage,
The coolness of the air was,
But the body does not suffer.
But mayalas soul
The weary soul
In prison too long ago
She got.
Peace yes silence
Around reigned,
And just the thought of it
It hurts me to the heart beat,
I go to the hill
And I shout lonely
Well, where are you?
Al close al far?
My trusty steed
Quietly next to go,
Dividing with me always
And joy and sorrow.
Drizzling rain,
A light breeze,
I circled my sorrow
In the autumn dance.
sadness is time
Around reigned
A fall slowly
Foliage covered all
And do not find traces
No small hint
About how to find you ?!
Suddenly life little life ?!
Well, where are you?!
Al close al far ?!